Wednesday, 30 October 2013
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THE MEETING (FIRST DRAFT):
We submitted our scripts on the 19th October and just recently received our feedback. A majority of the comments made, I expected. The most notable remarks for me was the fact that my ending was loosely written and not well thought into. I must admit that I had a hard time bringing the script to a close because none of my characters had an actual problem to solve; except for the fact that they were equally damaged and given an opportunity to see a better side in themselves which could be regarded as the change. Another problem was the nature of my script. Having watched crash I was inspired by a web of tales strung together to make one big story. However the inclusion of multiple locations and more characters only complicated the idea further and made the script impossible to produce visually. This also meant that I was diverting away from the project brief which isn't a very bright idea. The piece I've written is better suited for a thirty minute to one hour short film. I have realised now, that I need to cut back some scenes and work more on a binding factor for Clyde and Rowena to make the story work better. At the moment they happen to meet by chance which isn't very realistic. So after receiving this feedback and thinking it through, I went back to my idea development plan and worked into it some more. I also interacted with a couple of course-mates and my course-leader which helped to introduce more ideas concerning 'the meeting' between my main characters. A very good suggestion from Colleen and Chris was as follows: Clyde happens to have a lot of women in and out of his life, which automatically shows that he is not a committed/trustworthy person where relationships are concerned. Not only with women but also with family, he fails to communicate and understand the importance of their presence in his life. Given that he lives a bachelor lifestyle, he meets Rowena on the street/wherever and picks her up for the night which turns into the best night he's ever had, thus leading him to pursue a serious relationship for the first time in his life. However, Rowena has had a rocky road of her own, doing things many of us wouldn't to sustain a living (that isn't quite great). Her experience with men isn't the best and this hinders her from trusting any man, including Clyde. She doesn't know how to deal with commitment either as she's never had the opportunity to be in such a relationship. (By the way, All this will not be a part of the script but will be evident in the first scene.) (Visit the homepage to view my new and improved page plan.)
Monday, 14 October 2013
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PRESCRIPT WRITING NOTES:
Before I proceeded to writing my script I thought it would be best to have a detailed guideline I could refer to whilst writing my script. The whole point in pre-writing a script is to help you form a foundation/structure for your story, as opposed to writing whatever comes into mind. In the notes below, I write about the plot of my story and the nature of my characters so when writing the script I'm not left lost for words or thinking of outcomes. Below you can see a page where I've made a two table with bullet points that basically summarize the story for each character. I've seen a number of films where two or more stories coincide simultaneously and make a bigger story which comes to form when the characters interact with one another. This is what I'm trying to achieve. Although there are only notes for five scenes, each scene has been divided into two parts making it a ten minute screenplay. This allows time for the story to set in and the audience to understand the lives of my characters. The notes, to an extent take the form of a script, I did this because it makes it easier to associate the notes with a particular scene when writing the actual script.
